White Flash and Rumble play at tag

While Wind gives chase to both of them.

Tormented trees contend the fray

By swinging with their long-armed limbs.

Like a great percussive symphony,

Their roughhouse play shakes earth and sky,

And many of God’s creatures here

Can find no place to keep them dry.

Drops like liquid bullets dash

Against the crystal window pane,

And tiny rivulets retreat

To find their way back home again.

Flash and Rumble play their game;

Down the road they shake the air.

Wind transforms to gentle breeze

To tease at Willow’s long green hair.

Quiet tears of raindrops stay,

Sad from being shunned by Wind.

A faint moon shines to comfort them

‘Till all is quiet once again.

Hal C Clark – March, 2010

This is a playful poem that came to me after a stormy day. They seemed to me to be rowdy characters engaged in active play, wreaking chaos, then going someplace else. I guess this could be a poem for children. Anyway, enjoy and tell me what you think.

9 Responses to “Storm”

  1. 1 shamslayer April 21, 2010 at 10:21 am

    Nice poem! Love the imagery it brings up in my mind.

  2. 3 kseverny April 21, 2010 at 10:48 am

    whhat strikes me most about this poem is the flow of the writing.
    could it be that poetry comes naturally to you?

    • 4 Hal C Clark April 21, 2010 at 11:01 am

      I suppose it does. I have persued poetry writing for only about six months and have had a fair number of favorable comments on my work. It just seems to happen (with some work/revision, of course). I really appreciate your comment, and please come back again.

  3. 5 Laxaria April 23, 2010 at 10:18 am

    Interesting poem. πŸ™‚

    Try to play with onomatopoeia a little bit more. Being able to hear those words link to the actual sounds of a stormy day would definitely make it more engaging.

    • 6 Hal C Clark April 23, 2010 at 10:23 am

      Thanks for the suggestion. I am still trying to form my style and exploring different types of poems. I appreciate your comment and look forward to more. I will definitely try this out. Please visit again.

  4. 7 Ji April 24, 2010 at 7:15 pm

    I see the raindrops and the peacefulness…
    Cool poem!

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